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[Story] AleX

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1 [Story] AleX on Sun Feb 22, 2009 3:24 pm

AleX

Prelude
The night sky is filled with stars and constellations, but something else inhabits the void above our world, something that is disregarded and hidden from most of us……
Hello, my name is Alex Mulder, I am 10 years old, and, like my father, I am obsessed with UFOs and Extra-Terrestrials. My father is special FBI agent Fox Mulder and my mother Dana Mulder, they used to work together. 3 years ago, my Dad got abducted, in the middle of the night, I woke up and light poured into my room, after that I just woke up, and he was gone. We haven’t seen him since. Every day from then I have been looking up, hoping to find him.

Chapter 1
Today is my birthday! I got a new telescope, I have been excited to get it all year. It has a 200X optical zoom. I woke up really early and Mum got it out of the basement. I had breakfast and went upstairs. As I came downstairs and entered the kitchen, Mum sung happy birthday and I blew my candles out, My wish was that Dad would come back. “Mum, do you think Dad will ever come back?” I asked, it was a question I had been plaguing Mum since the day he disappeared.
“I told you not to talk about it, but if you want an answer, its that I just dont know, son, I just don’t know.”
“Sorry.” I spent the rest of the day on the computer, I always search for people who are going through the same experience, but I never find anybody. I feel lonely, and scared.
I woke up and looked at my watch, 2:00am, thats weird, I never wake up in the middle of the night, I looked around my room, and then I saw it….. the alien.



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2 Re: [Story] AleX on Sun Feb 22, 2009 3:40 pm

I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!
ITS AMAZING!!!
WOW!

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3 Re: [Story] AleX on Sun Feb 22, 2009 5:44 pm

Its pretty good but it needs a bit more depth. There was a few sentances that had no significance and it felt a bit out of order. Otherwise, its was a good overall first chapter. I wonder what will happen next?...

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4 Re: [Story] AleX on Thu Feb 26, 2009 3:24 pm

Mysterymason wrote:I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!
ITS AMAZING!!!
WOW!

He loves it, apparently.

It's nothing outstanding, but it's as good as the other stories, perhaps better than some.


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5 Re: [Story] AleX on Thu Feb 26, 2009 3:34 pm

Im wondering, and I need ur opinions, shall I write it in 3rd person or 1st person.

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6 Re: [Story] AleX on Thu Feb 26, 2009 3:52 pm

3rd, if you're saying "there it waited...the alien" because he surely couldn't have known that. But I rather like it in 1st. It's a tough decision.


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7 Re: [Story] AleX on Fri Feb 27, 2009 12:19 am

Zerzavy

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would you please make a spot in the story directory before posting this? (unless if someone has a good reason to get rid of the directory)


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8 Re: [Story] AleX on Fri Feb 27, 2009 12:28 am

Zerzavy wrote:would you please make a spot in the story directory before posting this? (unless if someone has a good reason to get rid of the directory)
<------- this person has a good reason for getting rid of it.

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9 Re: [Story] AleX on Fri Feb 27, 2009 12:37 am

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ouch, the awsome pwner has spoken.
anyone else think i should delete it?


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10 Re: [Story] AleX on Fri Feb 27, 2009 3:34 pm

don't delete this plz, it is so amazing!!!! I like it, so can we, just this once, not delete it?

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11 Re: [Story] AleX on Fri Feb 27, 2009 4:21 pm

He means deleting the Story Directory
DUH

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12 Re: [Story] AleX on Fri Feb 27, 2009 4:28 pm

Nice DUH. But mine are better.

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DUH

Kind of hard to see there...


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